Hi everyone,
I’m participating in the Weekend Writing Warrior, a weekly blog event during which writers share 8 to 10 sentences of one of their projects. You should check out the others right here: http://www.wewriwa.com/. I share this post with the Snippet Sunday Facebook group, which you can find here.
We’re back with another excerpt from my steampunk novel, Oil and Boiling Water (previous excerpts are compiled here). We’ve jumped a couple of lines of dialogue between Tatiana and Éloi (aka Mister Goldilocks) to where Damian (Tatiana’s brother) returns.
“She’s out of your league.” My brother dropped a bowl full of stew in front of me. “And you’re sitting at my place.”
“Milles excuses, monsieur. I only meant to preserve your sister’s peace.” Éloi rose and pulled out the chair for my brother with a theatrical bow. I remembered seeing a similar one done by a servant in a Castilian masked play. Had Éloi seen the play at one of the public shows or was he simply parodying nobles?
Was it usual for sailors to parody nobles?
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May 17th, 2015 at 6:37 am
LOL … sailors parody on anybody …. great snippet.
May 17th, 2015 at 9:52 am
Methinks Mr. Goldilocks has a further role to play in this story? I hope so–he’s beautifully twisty. 😀
May 17th, 2015 at 10:04 am
She has good observation skills. And she might have something to learn from the guy, maybe it’s not a good idea to kick him away so readily.
May 17th, 2015 at 10:46 am
Great eight!
May 17th, 2015 at 11:11 am
I’m with Iris. Sailors will parrot anybody. And so will their parrots… 😉
Nice to see our gal isn’t completely alone here.
May 17th, 2015 at 11:55 am
I like Eloi and his theatrics. Great snippet, Aheila. 🙂
May 17th, 2015 at 1:03 pm
Great snippet.
May 17th, 2015 at 1:17 pm
I really enjoy the way her mind works (I’m loving your snippets so much!). I can’t wait to learn more about all these characters.
May 17th, 2015 at 2:03 pm
I was already leaning toward camp Goldilocks, but now I’m pitching a tent. I realize that my camping metaphor doesn’t really work with sailors, but you get my drift, eh? 🙂
May 17th, 2015 at 4:25 pm
Hmm. Mr. Goldilocks sounds interesting.
May 17th, 2015 at 4:26 pm
Intriguing snippet. 🙂
May 17th, 2015 at 6:14 pm
Fun stuff. Can Eloi BE a noble perchance? Enjoying the story, especially the characterizations…great snippet.
May 17th, 2015 at 6:59 pm
Great interior responses to the action!
May 17th, 2015 at 8:47 pm
I love the French dialect that adds flavor to this snippet. Very nice!