Hi everyone,
I’m participating in the Weekend Writing Warrior, a weekly blog event during which writers share 8 sentences of one of their projects. You should check out the others right here: http://www.wewriwa.com/. I share this post with the Snippet Sunday Facebook group, which you can find here.
We’re back with another excerpt from my steampunk novel, Oil and Boiling Water (previous excerpts are compiled here). We’re jumping ahead a bit. Tatiana has changed into dry clothes, but chose trousers. Her brother doesn’t want her to wear that in the tavern downstairs. Some creative punctuation has occurred. 😉
“I’m not asking you to put on all the petticoats,” Damian coaxed, edging closer with the crooked smile that made him a favourite at court. “Just put the skirt over the breeches so your behind isn’t so… moulded by fabric.”
“In case you failed to notice, we’re running away from Father’s rules.”
“In case you failed to notice, we’re surrounded by ruffians and you can’t pass for my brother anymore,” Damian said ever so softly. “Your posterior has already caused drama, and you’ll never enter University if we both get killed here.”
Teeth clenched, I grabbed the skirt and slid it on. “Why did I grow breasts?”
“So you’d be easily wed?”
April 26th, 2015 at 8:16 am
Oh, that dramatic posterior of hers! lol I’m just loving the banter between brother and sister. Nicely done.
April 26th, 2015 at 5:46 pm
Thanks! The dynamics between the two of them has been one of my favorites from the get-go. It gets even better when Goldilocks joins the mix. lol
April 26th, 2015 at 8:52 am
Love that last line. Great snippet.
April 26th, 2015 at 5:50 pm
Thank you!
April 26th, 2015 at 12:08 pm
Love the banter between brother and sister. lol Can’t wait to read more.
April 26th, 2015 at 5:49 pm
Thanks! They entertain me, too. 😉
April 26th, 2015 at 12:16 pm
I feel for this heroine, who wants to follow her own path! And wear the darn trousers! Enjoying the story, great excerpt.
April 26th, 2015 at 5:35 pm
I’m glad you identify with her. It was an issue in previous drafts.
April 26th, 2015 at 7:55 pm
Her brother is really looking out for her. And he sounds like he’s got some common sense. I understand her frustration, though… 🙂 Good 8!
April 27th, 2015 at 5:24 pm
Yeah, she knows how important he is for her safety and that she should listen. It doesn’t mean she enjoys it.
April 26th, 2015 at 8:05 pm
Great snippet… who’d have thought there’d be all this bother over her butt? I like how you poke fun at the conventions of the period.
April 27th, 2015 at 5:07 pm
Indeed! A couple of edits ago, I realized there was a bit of comedy of etiquette in this story.
April 26th, 2015 at 11:16 pm
Hilarious and engaging dialogue. I love it!
April 27th, 2015 at 5:25 pm
Thank you!
April 27th, 2015 at 1:26 am
Great dialogue, but I think her brother is pressing his luck with that last line!
April 27th, 2015 at 5:26 pm
She’ll get back at him. 😉
April 27th, 2015 at 5:18 am
Enjoyed the banter 🙂
April 27th, 2015 at 5:32 pm
Thanks!
May 2nd, 2015 at 1:59 pm
Oh I’d deck him for the last line. Great snippet, Aheila. 🙂
May 3rd, 2015 at 7:25 am
She punches him on the shoulder in the next line. XD