Yes, dear reader, it’s that time of the month again: the return of the Absolute Write Water Cooler forums’ Blog Chain. Thus, there won’t be an Absurd Fable today but an other tasty treat.
This month, the theme was suggested by CScottMorris. He asked us to present the antagonist of our WIP (Work In Progress) under a positive light. Now that, I must say, is a problem for me.
I obviously cannot use the antagonist of Unforeseen Dives: revealing the baddy of a mystery would ruin the whole thing. At first, I didn’t want to use The Old Souls Series either as I don’t have much of the antagonist written. Well… I changed my mind; jumping without a chute sounds like fun. 😉
I recently presented, in my How I Write series, the process I used to outline The Old Souls Series. You can follow the link if you want additional context for this blog chain.
The only thing you really need to know is that the last book of the series is going to be narrated by the antagonist. In my never-ending quest for emotionally complex moments (I should probably talk about that someday but not now), I think it would be a nice challenge, and an awesome storytelling opportunity.
Hence, what I’m presenting you today is a first draft of a scene from a book I have yet to work my way up to. Or, more accurately, a concentrated taste of what the book is about. I’m currently working on The One Who Sees (which I posted scenes from in the last blog chain) and it’s Book 1. The antagonist’s book, The One Who Feeds, is outlined to be the 6th.
Okay, now you’ve got context. And a bunch of shameless plugs useful links. Let’s move on to the actual entertaining part.
The One Who Feeds
One liner: There are two possible ends to the reincarnation cycle: a well-deserved place in paradise and me.I sipped the last drop of the man’s soul and the dead body hit the ground. I was satiated for a few days, physically at least. No amount of purity and strength quenched the black hole in my chest or lightened up my mood.
“It’s a form of freedom,” I chided myself. “Not the one souls strive to achieve but ultimate death has a way of freeing people, doesn’t it?” My voice reverberated on the buildings bordering the empty street. For a fleeting moment, I felt like I wasn’t abandoned in an endless night.
Even as a toddler, as humans would call it, I knew something was wrong with me. The souls told me as I ingested them. It wasn’t right. I wasn’t natural. I was the unfortunate by-product of a crazy experiment. Not that the first souls I fed on said it so clearly; most of them were too young to know.
As a newborn, if ever a full-grown, artificially-conceived being can be considered as such, my survival required very little amount of food. I contented myself with plants. I learned later, by travelling the human world that flora’s souls were vastly unacknowledged. Some vegetarians based they’re whole beliefs around the concept that beings with a soul shouldn’t be consumed. Luckily, their ignorance only included animals in that category. They’d probably starve to death if they learned the truth.
That amused me. Eating a living thing shouldn’t weigh down on humans since souls dying by any other hand than mine went on their merry way to reincarnation.While most plants bore souls on their first incarnation, some of them hosted more mature souls such as mortals who screwed up badly on their previous life. In my early years, these were too rich for my system. As centuries went by, I ate them and moved on to bigger game. Complex flora’s souls, insects, small animals and larger beasts succeeded to one another until I craved humans. Problems started then.
Once consumed, souls live within me for quite some time. Plants and animals are too simple to be talkative. I can’t say the same for the mature human souls.
At first, I suffered from it so much that I tried to kill myself. Nothing would do. I guess it’s impossible to kill death. Vampires laughed at my vain attempts, thinking me utterly mad to beat myself up so much over food.
I always found vampires distasteful; they have no more manner than they have a soul.
When all else failed, I fasted. I went years without a soul, insolated in the middle of Antarctica. My skin parched. My muscles disintegrated. I walked a skeleton, and yet my body wouldn’t lay down and die. I pooled my will to keep myself from seeking food.
One day, I faltered.
I consumed a hundred people’s souls in three days times, which was more than I would have needed had I not developed an eating disorder. It was actually more than I could hold down at the time. I spurted most of them out, but it was too late for them to reach paradise. Such a waste.
My stubbornness caused me to make the mistake three times before I decided that a bulimic soul eater was a lot worst than accepting and controlling my soul consumption.I looked down at the man who satisfied my hunger tonight. His voice spiraled in my head. Thankfully, I mastered the way to shut them up a long time ago. This man was an old soul. After this life, if he had played his cards right, he would have moved on to the ultimate light, the positive end of reincarnation. paradise.
Instead, he died to feed me.
He was a rare treat, the most mature soul one could hunt on Earth. His energy would sustain me for a week or so, then I would need another.
These days, when I fell asleep, I couldn’t help but feel scared for all the souls in the world. I required top quality now. What would happen if I outgrew that too?
Here is the complete list of the AW July Blog Chain participants:
CScottMorris: http://cscottmorrisbooks.com/ and direct link to his post
Aheïla (That’s me so I guess you don’t need the link. 😉 )
AuburnAssassin: http://clairegillian.wordpress.com/
Collectonian: http://collectonian.livejournal.com/
DavidZahir: http://zahirblue.blogspot.com/
IrishAnnie: http://superpenpower.blogspot.com/
Anarchicq: http://anarchicq.com/
Proach: http://everythinghistorical.wordpress.com/
devero: http://mysticcrossroads.wordpress.com/
bri ness: http://briallison.blogspot.com/
hillaryjacques: http://www.hillaryjacques.blogspot.com/
LadyMage: http://www.katherinegilraine.com/
M.R.J. Le Blanc: http://libraryofandunien.blogspot.com/
Mariekeme: http://www.mariekenijkamp.com/
aimeelaine: http://www.aimeelaine.com/writing/blog
Lyra Jean: http://lyratorres.wordpress.com/
Fokker Aeroplanbau: http://rightfarright.blogspot.com/
Irissel: http://irissel.blogspot.com/
CowgirlPoet: http://frontnotes.blogspot.com/
Alpha Echo: http://writersramblings81.blogspot.com/
cryaegm: http://enigmainklings.blogspot.com/
July 2nd, 2010 at 10:23 am
You mean tofu has a soul? I loved it!
Its nice to see an immortal killer that is NOT another carbon-copy vampire.
July 2nd, 2010 at 10:44 am
*laughs* Yeah, when you put it like that…
That’s what I was aiming for. I’ll have vampires in one book of the series… Actually, make that two. I wanted my ultimate baddy to be quite different.
July 2nd, 2010 at 10:55 am
♥
I’m going to love that one.
I can’t thing of anything else to say ^^
July 2nd, 2010 at 11:02 am
Let’s just hope the 4 in-between Lily’s and this one are as interesting. 😉
July 2nd, 2010 at 8:54 pm
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July 5th, 2010 at 12:47 pm
“I decided that a bulimic soul eater was a lot worst than accepting and controlling my soul consumption.”
Awe, poor thing. 😉 I found that line kinda funny. Just the whole recognition part. 🙂
Good job!
July 5th, 2010 at 1:41 pm
I laughed because of that line when I proofread my post. I’m glad I’m not the only one! 😉
July 5th, 2010 at 1:37 pm
I like his voice…he is rather amusing 😀 Be curious to see how he wraps up the rest of your series (ambitious undertaking there, good luck!)
July 5th, 2010 at 1:43 pm
My parents keep saying I want to do everything too fast. Run before I could walk and other nonsense along those lines. I could definitely have started my novelist journey with something simpler but that’s just how I do things.
I recently came to realise, much to my surprise, that most of my characters are rather amusing. I’ll have to beat myself up to write purely tragic scenes… eventually… not now.
July 5th, 2010 at 4:53 pm
Epic! I thought it was very enjoyable! 🙂
July 5th, 2010 at 5:01 pm
Wow! I never thought my work would qualify as “epic”! That is soooo awesome!
July 5th, 2010 at 6:36 pm
Nothing I love more than a conflicted baddie. I got to admit this is a pretty scary thought:
“I required top quality now. What would happen if I outgrew that too?”
What IS on the other side of that? What happens? Delightful. I can’t wait to read your story.
July 5th, 2010 at 7:15 pm
I love conflicted baddie too. It’s much more emotionally complex than black and white. My objective is that by the end of the book, the reader isn’t sure whether he is happy or sad about the ending.
I can’t wait to see if I can pull that off. But I ought to finish Book 1 first. 😉
July 8th, 2010 at 12:41 am
Aheila,
You certainly succeeded in showing him in a sympathetic light. I had to stop and think about what he was actually doing before I realized that, yes, he is not a strange, lonely fellow.
“I required top quality now.” *shivers*
July 8th, 2010 at 5:19 am
Thanks Hillary!
I can’t wait to develop him more and make him interact with Lily and the rest of the bunch. 😉
July 8th, 2010 at 10:00 am
I love it. It was the kind of opening that really wraps you up and get you in there. good or bad, I want to know more about this guy.
Fantastic imagery and narrative Aheïla !
Looking forward to reading more about him one day.
July 8th, 2010 at 10:56 am
*does the happy dance*
Thank you very much, tavia.!
The more I read it the more I think “hmm… that’s prologue material”. I can’t wait to get there. Only 4 and a quarter more books to write. *laughs*
July 8th, 2010 at 2:11 pm
Great scene here, Aheila. I think this is going to be a very interesting book.
July 8th, 2010 at 2:53 pm
Thanks Proach!
July 8th, 2010 at 3:03 pm
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July 8th, 2010 at 3:32 pm
This was pretty awesome! Its not that he is just conflicted, its that he can’t help his nature. Like getting angry at a wolf for eating our new bunny, while we deplore his actions, he can’t help who he is. I love that for him it is not even a choice… SO compelling!
July 8th, 2010 at 3:49 pm
Apparently, I wrote it right because this was exactly the thing I was going for! Yay!
July 10th, 2010 at 12:27 pm
Eek! This was scary! This post actually had me shivering. I’m not quite sure why, but it definitely did, and once more it made me desperately want to read more. GOOD GOING!
July 10th, 2010 at 12:38 pm
Thanks Nina!
You’ll be happy to know that The One Who Sees is advancing. I hope to be able to send it out to beta readers in November. Worst case scenario will be the begining of next year.
So you’ll have more to read somewhere within the next 6 months. *laughs*
July 10th, 2010 at 10:21 pm
This is so freaking interesting! I’ve never read of a villain that was so…intriguing and yet frightening. The idea of something that can destroy souls…freaky.
I love it lol. He’s the perfect villain.
July 10th, 2010 at 10:43 pm
Thanks Amb! I also love him very much. There are some more intriguing and emotionally intricate situation planned for him that I can’t wait to write.
July 13th, 2010 at 6:11 am
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July 13th, 2010 at 12:05 pm
Wow, that’s great. I love the opening lines, and though I’m not sure I am sympathetic, exactly, I do want to know more. My curiosity is going haywire. I want to read more!
July 13th, 2010 at 12:13 pm
Thanks April!
I’ll definitely write more of him… in a few years. *laughs*